❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

[ScarDolphin]

I'm procrastinating my homework with writing on my current story welp

[winged-backpack]

I'm procrastinating my homework with writing on my current story welp

story of my life (and the other way around too, procrastinating writing my story by doing homework/revision)

[Ranger of the North]

I love that style of writing! It's just so difficult to fit into a story. That's the annoying bit. Styles like it are usually used at the beginning of a story, like a prologue. (Yes Im bringing up a prologue again but you can do some really cool things with them. I've never used one before maybe I should.)

It is cool, eh! It's like... abstract, eh c:

I love it! It kinda reminds me of the whole "One, two, Freddie's coming for you" thing from a Nightmare on Elm Street. I agree with what kawaiipanda said, it would be great as a prologue to a story, or at the very beginning. Style doesn't necessarily have to be consistent if it works within the story. It kinda sounds to me like a chanting that your character is hearing, with the descriptions in between. It's really good, I'd love to see what you do with it!

Thanks so much! I haven't heard/read that, actually — cool! Tbh I'm interested to see where it'll go, too XD

I love it! Especially the cliffhanger...what's going to happen next?

Thanks!

Ooh I love this! Really well done, wow. It’s super intense and I want to know more, haha.

Thanks! Hopefully I can come up with something XD

I'm procrastinating my homework with writing on my current story welp

I don't blame you XD


Hey guys! New competition! C:

[winged-backpack]

Hey guys, I've gotten a little further with my song and I'd love some feedback and critiques!! It's not in any particular order at the moment, it's just lyrics that night work rn.

Chorus
You and me, we're awesome on our own
Yeah, you and me, we don't need no one
You know that apart we're at our best
And we're always gonna be better than the rest
We'd be great apart forever
But you and me
Make one amazing person together

Verse(s)
Our first concert was an All Time Low
Making friends in the queue for Panic! at the Disco
Nights in the Fleece for random punk cover bands
When all I really want is to take hold of your hands
Denied entrance to that emo part but I didn't care
Cause even wondering the city at night is fun with you there

Bridge
Defend you from the guys who treat you like (poop)

That's all I got right now, any feedback is really appreciated!! <3

[Krenko]

@Ranger, that picture looks....interesting. I'll see what I can do with it. XD

The chorus is cool, and I'm very fond of the verse. IDK about the bridge, but that depends on the person.

[ptolemaea]

Ok, does anyone here write on episode?

I do and I’m kinda? Good at it?

Even though my stories glitch

[Ranger of the North]

Hey guys, I've updated my short-story thread! ‘Pure Imagination’ is my newest; thoughts?

Hey guys, I've gotten a little further with my song and I'd love some feedback and critiques!! It's not in any particular order at the moment, it's just lyrics that night work rn.

~snip~

That's all I got right now, any feedback is really appreciated!! <3

I like the rhythm of the verse ^^ (:

@Ranger, that picture looks....interesting. I'll see what I can do with it. XD

XD have fun

Ok, does anyone here write on episode?

I do and I’m kinda? Good at it?

Even though my stories glitch

What's 'writing on episode'? I don't think I've ever heard of it tbh o,o

[ptolemaea]

Episode Interactive is a storytelling app where you can make stories (kinda coding them) and share them with other authors on the app.

[ScarDolphin]

So I did a thing where I entered this writing comp and actually managed to come up with a short story in time without dying on it ahahah

[winged-backpack]

Hey guys, I've gotten a little further with my song and I'd love some feedback and critiques!! It's not in any particular order at the moment, it's just lyrics that night work rn.

~snip~

That's all I got right now, any feedback is really appreciated!! <3

I like the rhythm of the verse ^^ (:

Thanks! Honestly, I thought I worked out a melody for it just now, and then I realised that I was just singing the verse to the tune of the chorus in Pumped Up Kicks like??? It's a shame that's plagiarism cause it sounded pretty good /:
ALSO I just read your Pure Imagination short story, it's really good! I love the descriptions and I love that you really get a sense of what's happening, even though it's only (less than?) 100 words long!

The chorus is cool, and I'm very fond of the verse. IDK about the bridge, but that depends on the person.

Thank you! I'm still working on the bridge, and I need to work out another verse. I'm glad that it sounds alright so far. I'm thinking I'm going to go for the generic song structure of verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus, kinda similar to Cinderblock Garden by All Time Low?

Last thing, I entered a competiton to win a Longneck (literally my favourite species on this site) and I was wondering what you all thought of the short story I wrote to win him? I got a little carried away with it, and used some archaisms but I hope anyone who reads it enjoys <3