NaNoWriMo

[eden .]

o.o
wrong asian.
I'm not pie.
I'm asian.
pie's username is abandoned.
XD
oh but you can do a word war with someone for motivation, if you're competitive c;

[Postcard]

o.o
wrong asian.
I'm not pie.
I'm asian.
pie's username is abandoned.
XD
oh but you can do a word war with someone for motivation, if you're competitive c;

I know, I called a lot of people pie today. XD I ate pie for breakfast, so.. yeah.. (I'm crazy. XD)

But can someone help? I'm stuck on my story, and I don't know what to do. :c

[eden .]

o.o
wrong asian.
I'm not pie.
I'm asian.
pie's username is abandoned.
XD
oh but you can do a word war with someone for motivation, if you're competitive c;

I know, I called a lot of people pie today. XD I ate pie for breakfast, so.. yeah.. (I'm crazy. XD)

But can someone help? I'm stuck on my story, and I don't know what to do. :c

what is your problem?

[changed]

I'm going to make key lime pie in foodtech.


Lol.

Anyway. Words. Please come to me.

[Postcard]

o.o
wrong asian.
I'm not pie.
I'm asian.
pie's username is abandoned.
XD
oh but you can do a word war with someone for motivation, if you're competitive c;

I know, I called a lot of people pie today. XD I ate pie for breakfast, so.. yeah.. (I'm crazy. XD)

But can someone help? I'm stuck on my story, and I don't know what to do. :c

what is your problem?

I don't know how to tie two parts of my story together. (It's a really stupid story, so be warned. o.o)

A girl named Casey finds herself trapped in a small room, no way to get out, and 4 other people (3 boys and a girl) who have been there for almost a year. They talk, become more-or-less friends, then try to escape through the floorboards. They rip the floorboards, and jump through the hole that was created. Then they find themselves in a completely white place, no walls or anyone else for as far as they can see, and three of the group won't wake up. Casey and the quiet one of the group set off as scouts to see what this place really is.

I want them to be in a 'dream land' that has been corrupted by an evil figure, made of black smoke. That evil figure has taken control of the three who could not wake up, and now their being transformed into some of his minions over time. To rescue them, Casey and Joseph (the quiet one) need to learn what's going on and find a way into their heads to stop the figure.

First, they'll need someone to give them some fighting training, then find a way to get into their heads.

How do I tie this together to have it make sense without sounding cluttered? Thanks. :)

[Susiron]

I wouldn't really worry about making things too cluttered, being that the main purpose for NaNo is to just get down a rough draft.
Just put down what you feel that the story needs, and should you later decide to fix things and change up that part, you'll have full capacity to do so. :3
With the story I'm writing, I pretty much threw down a quick rough draft for it and now, editing it over with the rough draft to look at makes things go much more smoothly. I've changed many things from the original story-- changed the pace of several parts, taken out things, added things, etc-- and it all happened within the edits, whereas the core of the story was the original type out.

[eden .]

I don't know how to tie two parts of my story together. (It's a really stupid story, so be warned. o.o)

A girl named Casey finds herself trapped in a small room, no way to get out, and 4 other people (3 boys and a girl) who have been there for almost a year. They talk, become more-or-less friends, then try to escape through the floorboards. They rip the floorboards, and jump through the hole that was created. Then they find themselves in a completely white place, no walls or anyone else for as far as they can see, and three of the group won't wake up. Casey and the quiet one of the group set off as scouts to see what this place really is.

I want them to be in a 'dream land' that has been corrupted by an evil figure, made of black smoke. That evil figure has taken control of the three who could not wake up, and now their being transformed into some of his minions over time. To rescue them, Casey and Joseph (the quiet one) need to learn what's going on and find a way into their heads to stop the figure.

First, they'll need someone to give them some fighting training, then find a way to get into their heads.

How do I tie this together to have it make sense without sounding cluttered? Thanks.

well first of all, I'm seeing a lot of holes that you can fill in and use up more words. for example, why do the floorboards come apart now at all times? does Casey come in and they spontaneously decide to rip the floor apart? if they've been there for a year, doesn't it make sense that they would've tried that strategy long before Casey arrived?

furthermore, you're rather vague on how isolated they are. are there other people in that place? are there not? how are they going to find someone to find train them, then? what are the space limits of this area/how far does it go? how many people are there exactly? is it just like a small prison or a small country?

also, why do they suddenly go to sleep?

so my suggestion is fill in all of those holes because that will make your story much clearer as well as take up a lot of words to fill in the space. I don't know how much of the plot you want to fill in at the beginning, but keep those in mind as you go on.
try and keep the dialogue more spaced out and pretend you're speaking with someone. okay, if three of my friends have gone down, I'd be like "OMG WHAT IS HAPPENING" and then I'd question the quiet guy because he's been here longer, but of course he doesn't know what's going on either, and there are a lot of elements you can utilize. =3=

[Postcard]

I don't know how to tie two parts of my story together. (It's a really stupid story, so be warned. o.o)

A girl named Casey finds herself trapped in a small room, no way to get out, and 4 other people (3 boys and a girl) who have been there for almost a year. They talk, become more-or-less friends, then try to escape through the floorboards. They rip the floorboards, and jump through the hole that was created. Then they find themselves in a completely white place, no walls or anyone else for as far as they can see, and three of the group won't wake up. Casey and the quiet one of the group set off as scouts to see what this place really is.

I want them to be in a 'dream land' that has been corrupted by an evil figure, made of black smoke. That evil figure has taken control of the three who could not wake up, and now their being transformed into some of his minions over time. To rescue them, Casey and Joseph (the quiet one) need to learn what's going on and find a way into their heads to stop the figure.

First, they'll need someone to give them some fighting training, then find a way to get into their heads.

How do I tie this together to have it make sense without sounding cluttered? Thanks. :)

well first of all, I'm seeing a lot of holes that you can fill in and use up more words. for example, why do the floorboards come apart now at all times? does Casey come in and they spontaneously decide to rip the floor apart? if they've been there for a year, doesn't it make sense that they would've tried that strategy long before Casey arrived?

furthermore, you're rather vague on how isolated they are. are there other people in that place? are there not? how are they going to find someone to find train them, then? what are the space limits of this area/how far does it go? how many people are there exactly? is it just like a small prison or a small country?

also, why do they suddenly go to sleep?

so my suggestion is fill in all of those holes because that will make your story much clearer as well as take up a lot of words to fill in the space. I don't know how much of the plot you want to fill in at the beginning, but keep those in mind as you go on.
try and keep the dialogue more spaced out and pretend you're speaking with someone. okay, if three of my friends have gone down, I'd be like "OMG WHAT IS HAPPENING" and then I'd question the quiet guy because he's been here longer, but of course he doesn't know what's going on either, and there are a lot of elements you can utilize. =3=

I explained most of that in my story. X3 But thank you anyway. :3 I'll explain more about the setting and come up with something to do with the trainer.

EDIT:

Sorry, I didn't see your post. X3

I wouldn't really worry about making things too cluttered, being that the main purpose for NaNo is to just get down a rough draft.
Just put down what you feel that the story needs, and should you later decide to fix things and change up that part, you'll have full capacity to do so. :3
With the story I'm writing, I pretty much threw down a quick rough draft for it and now, editing it over with the rough draft to look at makes things go much more smoothly. I've changed many things from the original story-- changed the pace of several parts, taken out things, added things, etc-- and it all happened within the edits, whereas the core of the story was the original type out.

Alright. :3 Thanks.

[changed]

I want to write 2k in 3hours. I'm skrewed...

[Tiny Bubbles]

Why do I keep agreeing to go out places?

"Oh hey, Amy. Megan and Alan are coming to mine tonight. Wanna come?" "Oh sure. It's not like I have 43tgre4 homework assignments and 2000 words for NaNo to do. I'll come!"

Yep. I have so much homework that letters are involved. I can still do this!