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Postby Satninka » Tue Mar 31, 2015 10:46 pm

Hi everybody!
I'm from the Czech republic and I need help. We have a homework - write short essay about problems in our town. Could you check it and find mistakes? I would be really grateful! :D

My town

Tisnov is a quite calm town. I've lived here since my birth and I would not want to live in a different town. But nothing is perfect. There are some problems too. If you walk through the town, you can meet homeless people. They usually sit on bus stops or nearby the supermarkets. They are not afraid to came to you and ask you for money. Many people feel uncomfortable about it.

Nowadays Tisnov has a new problem - repairs. It is good that town leaders want to make Tisnov better, but if you would drive through the town, it would be really difficult. A lot of roads are closed because of these repairs.

The third problem are litter. In our town you can find a lot of trash cans, but people still throw packages on the ground!

If I were a mayor, I would give work to homeless people. They could pick packages and other litter from the ground and our town would be cleaner. And there would be no homeless people on bus stops. And what to do with repairs? I would do it gradually, so people would be able to drive through the town.
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Re: Ask for help with essay

Postby Luff » Tue Mar 31, 2015 10:53 pm

Satninka wrote:Hi everybody!
I'm from the Czech republic and I need help. We have a homework - write short essay about problems in our town. Could you check it and find mistakes? I would be really grateful! :D

My town

Tisnov is quite a calm town. I've lived here since my birth and I would not want to live in a different town. But nothing is perfect. There are some problems too. If you walk through the town, you can meet homeless people. They usually sit on bus stops or nearby the supermarkets. They are not afraid to come to you and ask you for money. Many people feel uncomfortable about it.

Nowadays Tisnov has a new problem - repairs. It is good that town leaders want to make Tisnov better, but if you would drove through the town, it would be really difficult. A lot of roads are closed because of these repairs.

The third problem is litter. In our town you can find a lot of trash cans, but people still throw rubbish on the ground!

If I were a mayor, I would give work to homeless people. They could pick packages and other litter from the ground and our town would be cleaner. And there would be no homeless people on bus stops. And what to do with repairs? I would do it gradually, so people would be able to drive through the town.



I've highlighted any mistakes I found and changed them to what I think is suitable :) Nice piece, well done!!
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Re: Ask for help with essay

Postby Satninka » Tue Mar 31, 2015 11:01 pm

Thank you very very much! :clap:

Luff wrote:
Satninka wrote:Hi everybody!
I'm from the Czech republic and I need help. We have a homework - write short essay about problems in our town. Could you check it and find mistakes? I would be really grateful! :D

My town

Tisnov is quite a calm town. I've lived here since my birth and I would not want to live in a different town. But nothing is perfect. There are some problems too. If you walk through the town, you can meet homeless people. They usually sit on bus stops or nearby the supermarkets. They are not afraid to come to you and ask you for money. Many people feel uncomfortable about it.

Nowadays Tisnov has a new problem - repairs. It is good that town leaders want to make Tisnov better, but if you would drove through the town, it would be really difficult. A lot of roads are closed because of these repairs.

The third problem is litter. In our town you can find a lot of trash cans, but people still throw rubbish on the ground!

If I were a mayor, I would give work to homeless people. They could pick packages and other litter from the ground and our town would be cleaner. And there would be no homeless people on bus stops. And what to do with repairs? I would do it gradually, so people would be able to drive through the town.



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