dear primal carnage team,
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE SEND ME A BETA INVITE PLEASE I WILL WORSHIP YOU
sincerely, bodie
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE SEND ME A BETA INVITE PLEASE I WILL WORSHIP YOU
sincerely, bodie



















.Spoonful.Of.Sugar. wrote:The only part of the story I'm working on that I like
Is the first paragraph
Taking his beloved in his arms, Geode lifted her from the rain soaked pavement. His head was bent, letting the tears that were forced through closed eyes, fall onto the girl’s already sodden corpse. Juliet, his love, his life... was dead. She lay in his arms, her skin growing cold, as the minutes passed. The girls blond hair was wet from the rain that fell around them, and it was plastered across her forehead, bangs obscuring most of her gray-blue eyes from view. Her eyes were still open, though they no longer had the look of pain they had adopted moments earlier. They stared vacantly off into the sky, a blank look had overtaken her face. Geode opened his eyes, anger in them had been replaced with sorrow. He glared up at the sky, letting the rain pelt his face. He did not scream, but simply stood there, holding her to his chest as though the beating of his heart would somehow reawaken her.
I don't even know how to get them to this spot...
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