~ Young Writers Club ~

[Shadowhunter,]

I'm a young writer...
Username:XxTheShadowGirlxX
What Type Of Writing Do You Do?: Fanfics (just finished writing one!), fantasy, action/adventure, and sometimes a random poem will pop out of nowhere XD
Other:I'm working on my writing. It not the best, but not too bad! The thing I have the most problems with is naming characters DX

[Meroei]

I'm a young writer...

Username: Meroei ( )

What Type Of Writing Do You Do?: Fantasy!!! Sometimes fanfiction

Other: Prof. Smiley is taking over the world!!!!

[-Ginny Weasly]

I will join, I love writing.

[PFDC]

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you did very well! the paragraph was not repetitive, and had a nice flow!

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though written well, it did not follow the prompt. if you edit your post and follow the prompt, then ill give you the UC and critque it

IF I DIDNT SEND YOU YOUR PET TELL ME!

Challenge of the Day!
I'll try to do one every day.
whoever takes part will get an Uncommon pet if they follow the prompt
Tomorrow ill tell you how to improve, and what you did well

Today's challenge!
Describe someting, anything, using no "ly" words (soflty, slowly, quietly, etc) the decription must be written as if the protagonist was seeing something for the first time, and must be at least five sentences

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[b]I HAVE COMPELETED THE CHALLENGE![/b]
Completed challenge:

What was easy:

What was hard:

What you learned:

mine:
I HAVE COMPELETED THE CHALLENGE!
The shadows fall on the ground, their perfect forms deformed by the trenches, and barbed wire. Grey's ice hair snagged the wind that howled across the desolate battlefield, strewn with fallen demons and men. His demonic, almost clear blue eyes flitted from one horror to the next, the only noise the wind. It was eerie, how quiet the once roaring battlefield was. The demons wreak havoc wherever they go, and this is just another day.
What was easy: describing the setting

What was hard: not using ly
What you learned: how repetitive my writing used to be!

[vanitas.]

I HAVE COMPELETED THE CHALLENGE!
Completed challenge:
(This is my character Chibi's perspective and thoughts of Earth when he crash landed on Earth~)

Oww...My head, the pulsing pain...Ugh...Where am I? Oh Gog...what is this place, its so green but at the same time brown...and colorful...to colorful for me. This isn't my home planet..this Must be the so called...Earth. Great! Just what I needed! Because I don't mind being stranded on this foreign planet...*sigh* I should get moving, before someone spots me. *walks* its so green and lush, its so rich of plantation...its so beautiful that its gross...I don't like this place, its nothing compared to my home planet. Oh my, are those the creatures who inhabit this Earth...Some have large lumps(females) and others don't(males), the ones with out the lumps are much more attractive...they're so colorful. This is way to strange for me, I have to find shelter before someone seriously sees me and does horrible things To me *scampers away*
What was easy:
Hah, making the story since I had a high muse~

What was hard:
It was pretty hard to try and not use ly~

What you learned:
That its better to not use so much -ly in a story

~^-*Shadowfury Katrina

[No Going Back]

I HAVE COMPELETED THE CHALLENGE!
Completed challenge: At first glance, she was beautiful. The young woman's features were symmetrical with a pleasing complexion, and her hair cascaded in a chestnut waterfall over her shoulders and chest. Her hands were sheathed in a pair of black leather gloves but he would have gambled that beneath the material they were dainty and unmarked- nothing about her appearance suggested she was accustomed to hard work.
She was betrayed by her eyes- grey, and so cold it broke his heart. If the rest of her was honed to cover up the fact she was a cold blooded killer, then these screamed it out for all the world to know.
Even when she was dead- because she had to die- he had the suspicion her optics would be granted back none of the emotion of their youth. Once a person was trained into a defence, it was hard to surrender the habit. In this case, her stubborness would cost her the only life she had.

What was easy: It was actually relatively easy to refrain from writing "ly"- I'm not a big user of it myself, so it just took a small adaption to my usual style.

What was hard: Coming up with something to write. The muse gods are not smiling on me. EDIT: Just read over this for typo check 2.0, and I want to crawl under a rock. Sorry for horrific writing.

What you learned: Actually (though I get the point of the lesson was to end the overuse of "ly", which I do take on board) I've obviously got another problem- when writing someone who's name has not been revealed, I abuse he/she far too much.

[scmarshtacky]

I HAVE COMPELETED THE CHALLENGE!
Completed challenge:
The lake shimmered in front of Royce, reflecting the cloudless blue sky. So many times had he dreamed of this peaceful place, but what it looked like now, in real life, was much different. The water trickled from the pond and into the small stream. A slight breeze rustled Royce's dark brown hair against his cheek, and the long blades of grass whispered with the slight movement, as if excited to see another living thing. The grass itself was colored a deep green, that stood out against the royal blue sky. Surrounding this plot of land was a dense forest, growing nothing but cedar trees. This place was untouched by the corruption of man. It was an undiscovered paradise miles away from the hustle and bustle of the crowded city, and miles away from Royce's own chaotic life. What a nice change it was to fall onto the ground, take a deep breath of clean air, and enjoy the moment.

What was easy: It wasn't particularly hard to write. The scene was clear in my head and I knew exactly what I wanted to be portrayed.

What was hard: Finding a substitution for the words that I couldn't use. I don't feel as though I overuse description, but when I need a word I can't have, I find myself momentarily stumped. Also discovering a way to bring the scene to life without them.

What you learned: Describing the place in detail without using these words is very limiting. It's important not to over use descriptive words but 'The water trickled lazily from the pond' turned simply into 'The water trickled from the pond.' In a scene where one wants to describe everything in extensive detail, doing something like this is difficult. Use the words, but don't abuse them.

[PFDC]

Just gonna post this now: ly words are fantastic, and I love using them, but writers often get addicted to them. It's okay to have a few, but a few soon turns into:
"The water slowly washed away, quietly touching the sandy beach. I quickly look away and sigh. The water always leaves so suddenly..."
See? What sounds better is:
'The water washed away, slow to leave the sand-covered beach. I look away without a second glance and sigh. The water always leaves so suddenly..."
Same sentences, less repetitive ^^

[scmarshtacky]

Yeah, there's definitely a point where description is overkill. None of it is necessary, but it spices up a work nice as long as it is used well. Words should always be used in moderation no matter what word it is. ^^ I personally find that I far overuse the word 'though'.

[{Inked Hearts}]

I'm a young writer...
Username: Picu(Ivy)
What Type Of Writing Do You Do?: Fantasy,poetry,drama,fan,and scary stories.
Other:At the moment I am working on a fantasy book called The Golden Wyvern on google drive and when I am done plan on sharing it.