by gloaming » Thu Mar 07, 2013 11:36 am
first off, welcome to the new members c:
second, would anyone be willing to maybe critique my writing? not even really critique i guess, maybe just read through a few of my posts and discuss the style and mechanics of my writing, give me a few tips and suggestions. i feel like there are a lot of things i could do better and i just wanted someone else's opinion.
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“
When you are born,” the golem said
softly, “your courage is new and clean.
You are brave enough for anything:
crawling off of staircases, saying your
first words without fearing that someone
will think you are foolish, putting strange
things in your mouth. But as you get
older, your courage attracts gunk, and
crusty things, and dirt, and fear, and
knowing how bad things can get and
what pain feels like. By the time you’re
half-grown, your courage barely moves
at all, it’s so grunged up with living. So
every once in awhile, you have to scrub
it up and get the works going, or else
you’ll never be brave again.
”
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