by grimgrinning_ » Fri Jan 25, 2013 5:46 pm
I know this is irrelevant until the last line but I needs critique so far :3 It's about my new charrie (A Hantane named Maresjo) and her mate who is not yet her mate in the story but will be eventually xD
“So who are they going for this time?” Riku’s dusty grey body landed lightly beside Bonir. He blinked his bright green eyes and flexed his wings.
Bonir’s bone-white pelt shone in the hazy winter sunlight. The animal pranced uneasily, nostrils flaring with anticipation. He was one of the few equine-dragons in the Knights’ possession, ridden by the leader Drasiir. He tossed his head against the tight reins. “The Hantane, I believe,” he breathed lowly.
Riku’s green eyes widened slightly. The Hanta were a strong being alone, and each subspecies had their own points. The Hantaoka, the canines, were vicious and powerful, while the Hantau, the equines, were strong, agile, and fast, as well as large. The Hantane were some of the most bloodthirsty and ruthless, with supreme agility and speed. They were really only beat by the Hantamo, the raptors, but those were so eager to aid the Knights in capturing other Hanta that they joined without a single raid. Hantamo were power-hungry, to say the least.
“We may just return without Drasiir,” Riku commented, just as his own rider, a man named League, took the reins tight in his hands and jumped onto Riku’s back.
Time to go, Riku thought with and twitch of his thick tail. The Knights are ready, Hantane. Are your warriors?