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Postby captaincaprag.hircus » Sun Oct 06, 2013 4:54 pm

I figured it would be a good idea to enter. I spend most of my time on here coloring anyway This may have been one of my lazier designs though. I kinda but made it up as i went rather then having a specific idea that i could go off of. I also usually end up doing line edits but i decided against it this time. I might add more entries when im feeling more up to it. I am just so tired. It's been a long day.
Anyway, any critique?

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At 5 Cuils, you ask for a hamburger, I give you a hamburger. You raise it to your lips and take a bite. Your eye twitches involuntarily. Across the street a father of three falls down the stairs. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. I give you a hamburger. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. You cannot swallow. There are children at the top of the stairs. A pickle shifts uneasily under the bun. I give you a hamburger. You look at my face, and I am pleading with you. The children are crying now. You raise the hamburger to your lips, tears stream down your face as you take a bite. I give you a hamburger. You are on your knees. You plead with me to go across the street. I hear only children's laughter. I give you a hamburger. You are screaming as you fall down the stairs. I am your child. You cannot see anything. You take a bite of the hamburger. The concrete rushes up to meet you. You awake with a start in your own bed. Your eye twitches involuntarily. I give you a hamburger. As you kill me, I do not make a sound.
I give you a hamburger.
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Re: Entry

Postby Puffee » Fri Oct 11, 2013 11:17 pm

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    I quite like this entry. The design looks pretty cool. It's just a bit hard to see all of it properly. I really like the koi, and the colours you chose. From what I can see, the fan looks awesome too. Even though that's not really the right way to do the eyes, I actually like it on this entry, it just fits. A great entry, but I would like a version where I can see the rest of it.

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    I actually like the idea of this one. I ove tis type of design, but it would be nice to have a bit more of it. It's little too simple, and there's just a bit too many colours for something like this. The tail and the eyes look pretty nice though.
    However, despite this, you need to change the koi and the fan. You did not design them for yourself, therefore it is technically a form of art theft. Unless this is changed, or you delete this entry, I'm going to have to disqualify you.

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    There's not much I can really say about this entry. I suppose the koi is quite cute, and the tail's something I've taken a liking too. Apart from that though, I just don't really like it. It's way too simple, and the fan's design is all over the place. It doesn't flow very well, and the eyes aren't really done properly. There's not much else I can say really, it just needs to flow more.
    I do really like the koi and the tail though.
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Re: Entry

Postby captaincaprag.hircus » Sat Oct 12, 2013 6:52 am

Puffee wrote:

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I actually like the idea of this one. I ove tis type of design, but it would be nice to have a bit more of it. It's little too simple, and there's just a bit too many colours for something like this. The tail and the eyes look pretty nice though.
However, despite this, you need to change the koi and the fan. You did not design them for yourself, therefore it is technically a form of art theft. Unless this is changed, or you delete this entry, I'm going to have to disqualify you.



sorry, i completely fogot about those XC i was more focused on the body. i'll change that right now

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There's not much I can really say about this entry. I suppose the koi is quite cute, and the tail's something I've taken a liking too. Apart from that though, I just don't really like it. It's way too simple, and the fan's design is all over the place. It doesn't flow very well, and the eyes aren't really done properly. There's not much else I can say really, it just needs to flow more.
I do really like the koi and the tail though.


i didnt have to much inspiration for this one. the only thing i had in mind was the colors. perhaps i may have more inspiration now. i'll see if i can work on it. i also forgot to change the eyes on this one.



Puffee wrote:Image
I quite like this entry. The design looks pretty cool. It's just a bit hard to see all of it properly. I really like the koi, and the colours you chose. From what I can see, the fan looks awesome too. Even though that's not really the right way to do the eyes, I actually like it on this entry, it just fits. A great entry, but I would like a version where I can see the rest of it.

i'll post the full version of this one after i edit the other two.

thank you for your input. it was greatly appreciated. i'll be posting more entries some time
At 5 Cuils, you ask for a hamburger, I give you a hamburger. You raise it to your lips and take a bite. Your eye twitches involuntarily. Across the street a father of three falls down the stairs. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. I give you a hamburger. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. You cannot swallow. There are children at the top of the stairs. A pickle shifts uneasily under the bun. I give you a hamburger. You look at my face, and I am pleading with you. The children are crying now. You raise the hamburger to your lips, tears stream down your face as you take a bite. I give you a hamburger. You are on your knees. You plead with me to go across the street. I hear only children's laughter. I give you a hamburger. You are screaming as you fall down the stairs. I am your child. You cannot see anything. You take a bite of the hamburger. The concrete rushes up to meet you. You awake with a start in your own bed. Your eye twitches involuntarily. I give you a hamburger. As you kill me, I do not make a sound.
I give you a hamburger.
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Re: Entry

Postby Puffee » Sat Oct 12, 2013 10:55 pm

    Wow, everything looks great now! They look amazing! <333
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Postby captaincaprag.hircus » Mon Oct 14, 2013 9:27 am

thank you :3
At 5 Cuils, you ask for a hamburger, I give you a hamburger. You raise it to your lips and take a bite. Your eye twitches involuntarily. Across the street a father of three falls down the stairs. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. I give you a hamburger. You swallow and look down at the hamburger in your hands. You cannot swallow. There are children at the top of the stairs. A pickle shifts uneasily under the bun. I give you a hamburger. You look at my face, and I am pleading with you. The children are crying now. You raise the hamburger to your lips, tears stream down your face as you take a bite. I give you a hamburger. You are on your knees. You plead with me to go across the street. I hear only children's laughter. I give you a hamburger. You are screaming as you fall down the stairs. I am your child. You cannot see anything. You take a bite of the hamburger. The concrete rushes up to meet you. You awake with a start in your own bed. Your eye twitches involuntarily. I give you a hamburger. As you kill me, I do not make a sound.
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