[troblsomtwins829]

even then, description of surroundings could be a little more clear. I mean, describe the cave she's in, her father, her siblings (if they're there) and what the place feels and smells like. maybe describe what she, herself looks like.

asside from the pictures you provide, it feels as though you want us to figure out everything you already have in your head about things. everything may be clear to you, but not to us, we have a handicap so you, as the writer, need to help us out.

btw, did my paragraph give you any ideas?

[Wanheda.]

(spoiler: he siblings were left because her parents only wanted 1 child... its technically passed of my friend's RP)
and yes i guess this will just be the rough draft XD

[troblsomtwins829]

I ask again, did my paragraph give you any ideas?

[Wanheda.]

o.o how i get to paragraph? XD im confusseeddd.. school killed me

[troblsomtwins829]

I was just lying there, dark red blood oozing slowly from my wound. My whole body was throb, throb, throbbing; it felt as though I had entered my own heart, and it bet across me, my fingers, my toes, my growing tailbone and wings…the pain was so intense. I knew at that point, this is the day I’m going to die. I just lye there, waiting, waiting for what happens to everyone before they die to happen to me; I was waiting for ‘my life to flash before my eyes.’ I tried to look down, to see what was causing this wretched bloodlust; but I couldn’t see it, my eyes were clouded with blood, black blood. Though I could not see, I could feel, I was clutching onto whatever it was jabbing into my stomach. It was a blade, but it felt more like cloth. A shadow blade. I heard someone call my name, someone I know, a friend I think; I couldn’t tell, my vision started to blur, and fade to black; as though I were simply falling asleep.

this paragraph :3

[Wanheda.]

ill dream of it tonight

[troblsomtwins829]

^^U

[troblsomtwins829]

(looks over previous posts)

...we should be friends :3 (soooo many things in common that most would run away from XD)

[Wanheda.]

XD
ok! fine by me! =D

[Wanheda.]

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