[anarchy, inc.]

Okay, not bad at all!
The first thing is that I would definitely up the smoothing on your pen, maybe to around 40-50%.
Second, the slope of the head is a bit steep. Let the go a bit flatter.
Third, size of the chin. Needs to be bigger!
Fourth, your head was a bit thick, I thinned it out just a little.
Fifth, your mane was a bit chunky. It's hair, remember! Let is be close and wavy with the occasional break.
Sixth, add a bit of detail to your head, jaw line, a bit of muscle, ect. I added the basic in for you.
Lastly, the neck. Again, the slope was a bit steep, let that be more gentle. And, just add a bit of muscle in, and you're off to a pretty good starts! Hope it helped!

[Mitta2345]

wow - thanks so much. This is one of the most helpful redlines I have got so far! You are very helpful in explaining what you have done!
thanks so much <3

[anarchy, inc.]

No problem c: I'm gladi t was helpful. If you want it to look like the horse was coming at you, I'd be glad to do that too.

[Mitta2345]

that would be incredibly helpful actually! I'm willing to pay for your time if you want, I've never payed an artists before, so you will have to explain your pricings etc.

[anarchy, inc.]

No need! As long as you're learning something from it that's payment enough! I'll get to the second redline as soon as I can. c:

[Mitta2345]

thanks so much x