[KingDiesel]

so this is another Seiki, but this one's name is Carmen. I haven't done a whole lot with her, but I'm still working on her story.

I really once again want critique on this, so if you can offer some, that'd be very nice!

here's what I have for her so far:

Carmen is the daughter of the leaders of the Clafton tribe. Carmen is also the eldest of the 4th generation of the entire pack.

She used to be a great fighter, but to defend her younger sister, Makilla from another species called a Restyty, a dragon polar bear thing, she faught under the Restyty's wrath, only to have her sight destroyed by the steam-like toxins that Restyties can breath out of a specific lung compartment. Lucky for Carmen, all she had lost was her sight, and not her freedom of pain, or even worse her life.

If a Restyty exhales the steam on an open wound, it may, or may not kill their victim/prey. When Fawn, and Pyroxene, the eldest sons of the Sirive tribe get separated from said tribe, only to be blown into the Clafton territory, cheerful Makilla introduces them to the kits of the Clafton tribe, as the full-growns are hunting. The kits worship Carmen almost to the point where it's creepy, because Carmen is the most fed kit of the pack, being the eldest, and the daughter of the leaders. Carmen shares her food with the kits, and in return, the other kits offer her protection as she can't see anything that may possibly attack her.


However, after investigating Fawn and Pyroxene through smell, she declares to be suspicious of them, as she figured they were from the Sirive tribe, simply from their scent. Fawn, being easily angered tries to bribe her to let them stay for a few days until they get back to their own tribe, asking something that Pyroxene could of worded much better-- why Fawn is screaming things at Carmen about how he's a "superior aristocrat" as if being enough reason to let them stay; If he had let Pyroxene ask nicely, then she would have let them stay.

Fawn and Pyroxene ended up giving up, and nested somewhere around the more barren areas of the tundra, leaving Carmen to speak to Makilla about their current new visitor, Albatross. For reasons Carmen didn't know, Albatross was obsessed with knowing about the Sirive tribe, so when he got back from hunting, she figured it would be a good idea to tell them about the passive aggressive visitors they *had.* Good idea? *Boy*, was she *wrong* . . .

[Kankri Vantas]

Cute species!
Only critique I would have is if Carmen is blind maybe make them look a little milkier maybe like this?

[KingDiesel]

ooh, okay! like a more creamier orange, and the pupil a bit more pale aswell? thank you for your critique! I'll put this into consideration next time I'm drawing her!