Its a wip.


I need some feedback and some sugestions on what to add. Im pretty pleased with this so far. <3




Name:
Chi′one (Pronounced Chi-on-ee) The corect way to pronounce the name is 'Key-on' But ive chosen a different way to pronounce it.
Chi′one is a greek name for the daughter of the greek gods Boreas and Oreithyia. The name Chi′one Means goddess of the snow Or in my sabers case- Ice. While looking up greek names for ice/snow I found some different ways to spell 'Chi′one'
-Khione
-Chione
-Chi′one <--- I chose this one.
Age (at most 400):
Chi′one isnt a very old Saber and she isnt very young. Shes somewhat in the middle and her age remains unknown- but its guessed to be around 256.
Gender:
Chi′one Is a Fae
Element:
Chi′one's element is ice.
Personality:
Attacks:
- Chi′one's stripes always glow with a burning light: No one actually knowns why until its to late. Its used as a defence more than a attack- for if an enemy tries to attack him and touches his burning bright stripes they too will be burnt- sometimes it stuns them for short periods of time.. Only long enough for Chi′one to kill or flee. Chi has the ability to cool his stripes down so he may interact and such with others.
-None have really seen this attack- It takes alot of energy to do and might even injure Chi′one. But he has been known for the misty white fog that comes from his mouth. Its chilling- and as soon as it touches you it freezes that part of your body. Its more dangerous for Chi than it is for the creature its fighting. For instance- Chi might not breath it out right and freeze her mouth shut or such.
-Used against water and air sabers- He can freeze their element and they become almost helpless to Chi.
-Chi can become a misty white fog thats almost invisable. She is able to attack like normal- yet the creature fighting her can not (most of the time) see her or injure her. This takes alot of energy though.
Armor type (silver, gold or bronze):
Silver
Special Ability:
-Walk on Water-
Chi's favorite thing to do. Chi always wished she was a water saber instead of ice- thinking itd be much more fun and such to be a water one rather than ice. In this longing wish- she somehow found a way she could become a water saber- by walking on water.
With each step shes able to freeze the water into ice for as long as shes standing there- as soon as she steps away it unfreezes leaving on trace she was there.
Story:

Two simple Words..Life..and death. Each are words we cannot describe, nor begin to express in any type of action, nor emotion.. Every person has a different story for each.. Some are beautiful moments in which we find ourselves holding our breaths, wishing for it to never end, in which we find ourselves wanting to remember forever and ever..and others are when we cry when looking back on,the painful memories and experiences that words cannot begin to express. Every person feels a different way when they think of those words. They think differently about life itself. I for one am still caught up looking for answers.. I wonder if things really do happen for a reason, or even if there is someone looking down at us, controlling our lives. Or why does change itself happen. How we can embrace it's harsh conditions and manage it so we aren't so lost..worrying and wondering what may happen next... How can we surivive this cruel thing called life..? I find myself lost for words when thinking back at that day.
Forever lost in the moments I can hardly remember.. In a blissful state of mind when thinking back to when she was born.
When I was able to get so close to her, lost within the moment... Blinded by the Sheer joy and confidence that this wouldnt ever come to an end.. Then every thing was torn away - Snatched from me like I was just a mere child. I was suposed to be able to protect her.. and everyone else..
But I couldnt.. Which changed my life forever.
The fae's eyes slowly blinked open for the first time in her life the light bright and blinding the pup for moments before she yawned quietly stretching out across the dens floor and snuggling closer to her mothers warmth.. The sensation sizzled through the cubs fragile and tiny body as the pup got up- wobbling ever closer to her mother and began to suckle. The sweet milk rushing over the white, soft tounge of the young cub. She had been the first to open her eyes and the first to stand and walk about without much trouble. The female cub was still unnamed as was the rest of her litter mates but she didnt mind- for she knew nothing of names: She was just a mere cub, but she showed intelligence straight away. As days passed the cubs grew older and stronger and you could find the fae sitting at the edge of the den staring out at the open world. She was of course not afraid of the place- while he litter mates still huddled up to her mother daily trying to keep safe swallowed by their mothers warmth. They litter was still nameless except for the rapidly growing- physically and mentally. They only element that was obvious was the faes- so the mother finally thought of a name. Chi'one. Chi'one was greek for ice goddess and her mother thought it fit perfectly for the young fae considering her element was ice.
The fae grew to the dislike of any cold place- for what reason worried her parents.
She is the ice element! She shouldnt be like that! Her parents would argue inside of the den in hushed voices- as if Chi couldnt hear them, and of course she pretended not too. Most of the time she zoned out anyway- feeling the suns warmth against her face heating her body up, watching the butterflies flutter their wings across the open meadow, and seeing all the other creatures wandering through the woods like it was just that peaceful every day.
About a month passed before Chi found the courage to actually go outside. Chi was now about the size of an adult- she was tall and slim- but built with muscle. She hadnt had permission so her litter mates stood at the door-still afraid to come outside. They called at her to come back and whined and whimpered as Chi just ignored them. Sick of her parents always fighting about her and her frightened litter mates- But she grew attacted to the runt of the litter. She was still nameless and possessed the element she had longed for since she was able to speak.. Water.
The runt called after Chi and raced across the meadow chasing after Chi frightened and shaking. But the fae wasnt going to let her bigger sister go alone. The two raced around in the woods laughing and giggling on. Chasing the butterflies and feeling the heat of the day against their backs. The roamed through the woods- stumbling about and carrying on: Careful to keep the den in sight.. unaware that their parents had returned. They continued for hours until finally- Chi took the tired pup in her mouth and trudged home- the heavy feeling of having to return to their boring old den was not exciting to Chi took her time getting back. The sun had long gone down by the time they got home and quietly Chi sneaked into the den- just to be scared by her parents standing near the back of the den: Scolds on both of their faces.
Where have you been young lady? Her mother snarled at her as she took her pup away from Chi's mouth and set her with the rest of the sleeping cubs. You could have gotten hurt! Or worse- You could have gotten Killed Chi'one. You could have gotten your sister killed! Her father Roared at her awaking the other litter mates as they layed wide-eyed and whimpering quietly at the anger their parents had possessed over the thing Chi had done. Chi now felt a bit guilt and she whimpered lowering herself to the ground. You has us worried sick and you think disapearing like that was alright? Her mother snarled again as she spoke quietly to Chi.Never again. Her father snapped at her before turning and disapearing further in the dark depths of the cave. Her mother shook her head. A pity for such a talented Cub She murmered to herself before turning and following her mate.
After they had left- Chi stood with trembling legs but didnt show any fear as she padded over to her litter mates bed. Are you Crazy Chi?! One of her brothers nudged her roughly as he spoke gazing at her with burning amber eyes- he had possessed the element of fire. Maybe. Was all she replied before she shut her eyes. Sleep now. She whispered to them as one by one they fell asleep. Chi stayed away watching the world outside- longing to be out there again.. It was.. different. Strange yet unique.. and beautiful. The stars twinkled in the dark sky- and the moon slowly rose to the middle of the sky, giving off its glowing light. Thoughts trinkling into Chi's head about her next adventure.. as she slowly let her head fall to the ground and her heavy eyelids to close and for herself to relax.. and just fall asleep..
She awoke in a chill- her body trembling in sweat as she heard a saber's dying roar. The pups around her gone.
Where are they...? What are those roars..? If they left why did they take me..? Thoughts rushed into her head playing mind games with herself- as the worst came out and filled her already heavy heart and soul. She heard the dying Sabers roar again and she finally got up and raced outside to see the ground painted in blood. The clans bodies laying about- scattered across the meadow. She whimpered as she fell to the ground staring out at the bodies. Wheres my mother and father..? My sisters and brothers..? Where are they...? She started to cry out in pain as she trembled on the ground- the fear of loosing them all tugged at her mind as she cried out again.

-Wip-




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