Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

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Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Sat Mar 03, 2012 11:00 am

Intro

She ran. Her feet moved like lightning against the ground. Her heart thumped faster than her footsteps. Sweat had dripped down her brow, but she didn't make any attempt to wipe it off. Words were screamed behind her, but she couldn't make out any over the booming thunder. The rain slammed against the ground along with some lightning. Why was it just her luck? She gasped for breath as she ran harder, she couldn't stop, not on her death punishment. There it was. Right in front of her eyes laid a forest, the only way she can lose the villagers. It was- her foot was caught in a hole dug in the ground. She soon found herself falling hard to the compacted ground. No! This couldn't happen. She had to get up! Her knees moved across the ground, dragging her hurt ankle with it. It was too late. Their dirty faces surrounded her, giving no respect. Her hand raised into the air to plead for mercy, but it was stabbed against the ground by a long spear. This was it, this was her end. This is Trouble'd.

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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby santinel » Mon Mar 12, 2012 6:31 am

o3o

Make more? I'd like to read~

Another day, still on
the same track, People
change but they just
don’t change back, And
every road seems to
lead uphill, You say you
won’t break but I know
you will cause, People are
stupid and they’re all the
same, Same old story just
a different day, And people
go lengths to give you hell,
But that's okay, I'm sure they
mean it well
-People don't change-
~By me<3


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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Mon Mar 12, 2012 6:41 am

Thanks, i'm halfway done with the first paragraph, maybe it will be finished soon XD
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Sat Apr 21, 2012 5:10 pm

Trouble'd
IChapter One ╪ Scarlet|


The date was March 6, 1790, and it was the middle of Summer in a kingdom of England. In the heart of the kingdom was the castle, home to a handsome young prince by the name of Kanen. Surrounding the castle, were small homes for the peasants to live. Each peasant had a duty, whether it was to clean or run a business. Life wasn't completely fair, yet it worked for all.

The day was still young, with many awake and starting on their daily chores. One young lass, by the name of Rose, was heading toward the kingdom's church. Rose was a rather private, red head girl only by the age of 17. She was very abnormal, but also held the title of the priest's daughter. Her father had dreampt of a son, but yet her mother had died only after one child. Forever, her true death would remain a secret, for only Rose knows the truth. Having no son, Rose's father can't leave any child to take his place as priest. It was unholy for a female to become a priest. So, instead, Rose would help out and clean. She was welcome as any other guest, only taking on simple household chores built for females at the time.

When the day was over, and the work was finished, Rose would hide in a cellar she had built herself. It laid in the yard, covered by dirt so it wouldn't be found by prying eyes. The room was small, yet big enough for her and some space. This room was everything to her. It held all of her secrecy, including her undying love for Prince Kanen. His gorgeous blue eyes and soft blond hair, it had most girls under his spell. One thing that she loved to do, but had to stay underground, was her witchcraft. It was forbidden, so she had to hide it. If anyone found out, she would be executed immediately.

Rose was cleaning seats in the church. In her hand was a dirty rag soaked with water. For an hour she had been wiping the cold stone seats. A horn echoed through the air, sending Rose with excitement. It only meant one thing; her love was here. She darted outside, her long legs moving swiftly in the wind. Upon her was a large crowd, all surrounding a few horses. Upon a horse was Prince Kanen, surrounded with his guards. His smile sent an uneasy feeling into Rose, sending her with envy.

Only a few feet was Grace, a regular worshiper to the church. She was young, only of the age 16, but still ever as elegant. Her hair was a light blond, and curled to rest at her waist. Her eyes were sea-blue, with long eyelashes. By far she was one of the most gorgeous girls Rose has seen, but she wouldn't accept it. Grace gave a smile, she had also fancy'd Kanen too. It didn't surprise Rose, for many girls had. Grace had been dressed in a satin gown, with silk stitched in. It beats the dirty work clothes Rose is wearing. Wearing such an elegant gown showed wealth, which was the only necessary to win the had of Kanen. It was only right for a noble to became queen, so peasants were often ignored.

A man jumped off one of the horses, opening a scroll. He coughed, clearing his throat, then read "Here thee, Hear thee. The time has come for our prince to become a king. In order to take the throne, he must find a wife to rule at his side. He will now be choosing his lovely queen." A queen? Was this really happening? Rose fell with awe. This might be her chance, if he would choose her.

Kanen looked at the short man who had spoke, a smile filled his face as he thanked him. Getting off his horse, Kanen straightened up. He scanned the crowd for a new wife. Once his eyes reached Rose, he took a breath. Their eyes locked together. Kanen took a step toward her, then another. Before she knew it Kanen was only a few feet away. He took a breath then said "Would you take the honor of being my love?" He reached out his hand for her to take.

Rose's eyes filled with joy. Was she the one he chose? She opened her mouth to speak, only to be interrupted by another voice. Rose looked toward the source, only to find Grace dart out and collapse onto Kanen. She nodded, hugging his body. Kanen was startled by the enjoyment, but responded by hugging her back. The two together sickened Rose. Kanen wasn't even talking to Rose in the first place. He probably didn't even see her.

By then, Rose collapsed to the ground. A few people noticed, but just ignored her. An hour passed, most people had gone back to their chores. Rose was still there, curled into a ball. Her hands were covering her face as she cried. He never loved her. She was stupid to think that. A scream escaped her lips, pain sent along. Her fists were clenched tight and she ground her teeth with anger. It sickened her. It made her feel sick at the thought of Grace stealing her spot. Breathing under her breath, she hissed "I'll show her.. I'll show everybody who I really am." A smile came across her face, many thoughts entering her mind. She was going to make Grace wish she had never been born.
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby tawnee » Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:36 pm

Why is there an apostrophe between trouble and d?
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Sun Apr 22, 2012 2:40 pm

It's just how I style it. Yes, grammar wise it's just 'troubled', but as my title it's 'Trouble'd'.
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Sun May 06, 2012 12:12 pm

Trouble'd
|Chapter Two ╪ Revenge|


I ran at a fast pace, my breathing filled my ears. It was cold, sending chills down my spine. Anger was growing at every step I took. Just the thought of that stupid girl made me bleed blood from my eyes. Her long flowing hair just waiting to be cut off. Reaching my small den, I cried in the small space I had. Tears flooded my face, falling to my chin and dropping against the ground. The annoyance of the splash against the dirt beneath my feet just sent more frustration to me.

With the little strength I had left I brought myself to my feet. I studied the contents of my room. In front of me lay a small crate, only but emptiness inside. On top was laid a few candles, surrounding a drawing of Prince Kanen. Beside rested a knife, passed down generations of the witches in my family. It was eventually passed down to me when I was a small child, but had no idea of the meaning it brings. Picking up the knife, I studied it carefully, noticing an engraving which read 'Diabolus Parvulus'. Just the sight of the wretched name sent more anger to my soul. "I may be evil.. but I will never be your child" I breathed into the air. A scream escaped my lips, resulting in the knife being forced into the wall.

Revenge must be put to action. Punishment must come for Grace's crimes. Death immediately came to thought, but how? She must learn that she has sinned! To second chances for a greedy noble. A smile etched it's way across my lips, I have the perfect plan.

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The sun had risen, and I found myself lying on the ground. Perched on the wall was the knife, waiting for it's owner to grasp it. Knowing I was the last witch of her bloodline, I rose to my feet. My hand found it's way to the handle, where my fingers gripped it. Pulling it from the wall, it soon rested on my hand. After washing up, I made my way toward the town church, which belonged to my father. Even the rich come to pray. Grace, who I would meet, came quite early.

Once reaching my destination, I made my way inside the large building. The sun was barely in sight, uncovering the fact that not many were up. The church was empty, which made it easier for Rose. I must work quickly , for Grace could be here any second. Rushing to a small room that holds the robes, I slid one on. It fell to the ground, pointing out the fact that it was too large for my body. It was not right for a female to wear a holy cloak, but nothing 'holy' mattered anymore.

"Rose?"

The voice filled my ears as I immediately recognized it. A deep sigh escaped my lips, wishing it hadn't come to this. I turned around, only finding a curious man in front of me. He was tall, and had broad shoulders. He had a big chin, representing his sex. Flowing on his head was gold brown hair an inch long.

"What are you doing?"

His expression sent fear and distress into the air. He looked at me with shame, sending a tear down my eye. He shouldn't have come, not today. Not never. He made me do this, it was his fault. "I am doing what is deserved. Sadly, you have seen something you shouldn't have" The words escaped my lips, sending pain to my heart.

"What do you me-!"

He started to talk, but was interrupted my his own choking sound. I felt another tear fall as my fists clenched, sending him rising in the air. "Don't choke on your own words." I said with a scratch in my voice. The tighter my fists were, the more he gasped for a breath. Just one to save his life.

I watched him with guilt. I watched this man die in front of me. His hands were grasped around his neck, as if to help the choking. A single minute passed before he was at his weakest. He stopped fighting, stopped gasping for a breath. He had given up, and let it come. By that time, tears burned as they erupted down my cheeks. Unfolding my hands, the man fell to the ground. He fell on his back, but made no move to stop the fall. He was truly lifeless. I stood and watched him, trying to fight the pain. It was too much and soon I fell to the floor.

Beside him I sat, crying on his chest. His face turned pale, he had breathed no more. I looked him in the eyes, which watered up. My hand reached out and closed them shut as I breathed these words
"Sleep well, Father"




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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Fuzzy Keldeo » Tue May 08, 2012 10:56 am

Will read 3 paragraph or chapt. 1
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby Yuki. » Tue May 08, 2012 11:55 am

I'm sorry? I don't mean to be rude, but I'm half asleep and can't understand that. Sorry TeT
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Re: Trouble'd |small short story by snow|

Postby DaringAsh » Mon May 21, 2012 3:47 pm

I just love your story...! It is amazing! I wish I could write. XD
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