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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby ThunderCedar » Tue Dec 26, 2017 5:35 pm

BucketORandomness wrote:Merpy Christmidays! Random challenge/prompt thing. Using word choice and tone in your writing, write a scene that gives this sentence emotion:

"You don't fight well with others," she said.

A quote out of context for the greater good. My creative writing teacher absolutely hates words like announced or cried or exclaimed as a substitute for said. His reasons are that the way the person should have said it should be evident by their actions before and after, the words they used, and the tone of the scene in general. I've personally taken it as a challenge in my writing and thought I'd share something that came up in conversation today >^.^<

I like that your teacher is that way actually. As tempting as it may be to use tags to show the emotion of a sentence, it can really make a dialogue more confusing rather than clarifying the emotion. It's been proven that "said" is the best go-to because it tends to fade in the background and go unnoticed, which is something you really want a dialogue tag to do. A dialogue tag's purpose is to define who is speaking, rather than to define their emotion. I understand using the occasional "asked" if it's a question, and "replied" / "responded" but I'd stop there mostly. If course exceptions can be made and some other tags should sometimes be used but this is the main rule according to pretty much all 5 sources I've visited for help writing dialogue.

I will try to write something on this, thanks for sharing!
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Ranger of the North » Tue Dec 26, 2017 6:02 pm

Merry late Christmas, guys! :D I hope you had an amazing day, and if you didn't, may things soon get better!


WinterSerperior wrote:Ranger, from what you've seen do you like Lukas as a beginning antagonist? (Yes he and Autumn are mine too. I forgot to say that in PM bc i momentarily forgot about his parents xD) I mean he never shows up past the Prologue because I have no clue how to shoehorn him in with the rest of my plot and the plot of pokemans. So at this point he's a short ended plot point that basically serves no purpose and never really shows up again.
I can't actually remember enough to know, heh XD:
Is it still up on Wattpad, or did you remove the whole thing? o,o


TheSongOfTheStars wrote:Also! I finished the Advent Challenge, yay!
Far out, go you! :D *clapping*


winged-backpack wrote:(I might be taking a bit of a break from the thread for a while, I'll be lurking sometimes but I probably won't be posting for a while)
See ya later! BBS! C:


BucketORandomness wrote:Merpy Christmidays! Random challenge/prompt thing. Using word choice and tone in your writing, write a scene that gives this sentence emotion:

"You don't fight well with others," she said.

A quote out of context for the greater good. My creative writing teacher absolutely hates words like announced or cried or exclaimed as a substitute for said. His reasons are that the way the person should have said it should be evident by their actions before and after, the words they used, and the tone of the scene in general. I've personally taken it as a challenge in my writing and thought I'd share something that came up in conversation today >^.^<
I am doing this. Or I might. We'll see. But I hope I get to it XD
I'm in camp moderation-and-variety-is-key :p Too many 'said's and not enough exclamations/other words make a book ridiculously boring, but too many exclamations/other words and not enough 'said's makes my head hurt ;p Taking either to the extreme, in my opinion, shows a lack of experience cx
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Yubel Fated » Wed Dec 27, 2017 5:41 pm

WinterSerperior wrote:Ranger, from what you've seen do you like Lukas as a beginning antagonist? (Yes he and Autumn are mine too. I forgot to say that in PM bc i momentarily forgot about his parents xD) I mean he never shows up past the Prologue because I have no clue how to shoehorn him in with the rest of my plot and the plot of pokemans. So at this point he's a short ended plot point that basically serves no purpose and never really shows up again.
I can't actually remember enough to know, heh XD:
Is it still up on Wattpad, or did you remove the whole thing? o,o


I removed the whole thing. Its not deleted but just in my unpublished works list. Though you can still find it here I've been too lazy to take it down everywhere :T

BucketORandomness wrote:Merpy Christmidays! Random challenge/prompt thing. Using word choice and tone in your writing, write a scene that gives this sentence emotion:

"You don't fight well with others," she said.

A quote out of context for the greater good. My creative writing teacher absolutely hates words like announced or cried or exclaimed as a substitute for said. His reasons are that the way the person should have said it should be evident by their actions before and after, the words they used, and the tone of the scene in general. I've personally taken it as a challenge in my writing and thought I'd share something that came up in conversation today >^.^<


To be honest.... I partially disagree and agree with your teacher. There can be a happy medium in my opinion. I agree with Song. Using said over and over does get repetitive and starts to sound a bit.... bad. But some people, like the writer for the Gregor the Overlander series, can use it well and go under the radar with using the word over and over.

I agree with your teacher in the aspect that it should be shown not told though.















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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Ranger of the North » Thu Dec 28, 2017 8:52 pm

WinterSerperior wrote:
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WinterSerperior wrote:Ranger, from what you've seen do you like Lukas as a beginning antagonist? (Yes he and Autumn are mine too. I forgot to say that in PM bc i momentarily forgot about his parents xD) I mean he never shows up past the Prologue because I have no clue how to shoehorn him in with the rest of my plot and the plot of pokemans. So at this point he's a short ended plot point that basically serves no purpose and never really shows up again.
I can't actually remember enough to know, heh XD:
Is it still up on Wattpad, or did you remove the whole thing? o,o
I removed the whole thing. Its not deleted but just in my unpublished works list. Though you can still find it here I've been too lazy to take it down everywhere :T
Cool! Ta c:
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby TheSongOfTheStars » Sun Dec 31, 2017 7:18 am

:lol: Divebombs thread

Yoooo, where is eveyone? Mmm....I know! Question!

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[b]What are your writing goals for 2018?[/b]

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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Ranger of the North » Sun Dec 31, 2017 11:17 am

What are your writing goals for 2018?
Stick! With! My! Project!!!!!!

watch me fail X'D
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Arya22 » Sun Dec 31, 2017 11:20 am

What are your writing goals for 2018?

Finish at least one story...
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby Aliria » Sun Dec 31, 2017 11:26 am

What are your writing goals for 2018?
Write. At all.
I'll send out my soul
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby TheSongOfTheStars » Sun Dec 31, 2017 1:12 pm

What are your writing goals for 2018?
Oops forgot to answer my own question.
My goals are to edit my Nano story and by the end of the year have it in a publishable format. Also to complete and edit a short story that I meant to be done with this month.
And thirdly I like to complete at least one of the 100 prompt challenges.

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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

Postby polysaccharide » Sun Dec 31, 2017 1:20 pm

    what are your writing goals for 2018?
    uuuuuuuhhhhh write (and finish) something for once in my sad life
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