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Postby Thovatos » Sat Dec 23, 2017 9:10 pm

“Creativity is an act of defiance.”
~Twyla Tharp


Have you ever written a book or a poem and have been looking to receive criticism on it or perhaps tips on style, diction, setting, theme, or perhaps something in between? Have you ever wanted to know the difference between "can not" and "cannot"? Well, this place can be for you! Whether it is self-promotion, an honest calling, or just means to get some advice, please post accordingly to these rules below! Please note, a detailed explanation for my opinions on things will take a little time to post, so please give me at least a day to respond to you at most. This is concerning if I'm at school or if you messaged me at the time I'm just heading to bead. If you also want to comment on other's works here, feel free to also add your opinion or even say why you think mine is not just. Again, what I comment is only an opinion! So, if you wish to post here, please refer to this list of rules below!


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1.) If you are posting something from a book, (i.e from a novel you have written or a story) Make sure it is like a chapter's length or the arc of the novel. I cannot review a whole story in only a few hours. I can however asses the plot, characterization (refer to rule 3), themes, ect.
2.) If you wish for me to take a peek at a poem, I would more than happily give my assessment of the poems you send me. (I literally do this everyday in class and have had to write several papers over these and I quite like them!) I can judge themes, style, diction, and author's word choice, or even give what I think the meaning of you poem is based on what you give me. As for poems, feel free to post the whole poem. I have no limit on their length.
3.) As for reviewing characterization in a book/novel, this is not a place to post original characters for me to review. I am here to review the book as a whole, and by characterization, I am speaking on the effect either the character has on the arc of the book or visa versa.
4.) I will find out if you have taken someone else's work. I will, and don't think I won't. Plagiarizing someone else's things is a huge pet peeve of mine, and I would hate to have to call others out for taking the works of another. I write my own books, so I understand the frustration of someone else's characters and story.
5.) Feel free to ask me about grammar. I enjoy discussing grammar and word choice in its entirety.
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Postby Rylf » Tue Jan 30, 2018 2:29 pm

Imma kick this page off. Sweet~ :3

Trading Hearts

My heart was in my own hands.
A bleeding organ, bound to hell.
Ready to be fed to Cerberus himself.
I give to you, this broken soul.
This troubled mind that took its tole.
Your hands are warm on my cold heart.
You hold it tenderly, but fall it won't.
It begins to thump an irregular rhythm.
Seeking the love it has been so long forbidden.
The beat is slow, not measured but there.
A sound that had been absent for many years.
The life being jolted back into my heart.
By your hands; so soft and gentle.
They hold me close and don't let go.
Know that is which I desire the most.
A grip that's firm, yet loving still.
The man that is you.
So sweet.
Like sugar.
But with spice.
A dash of something different.
Not pretty, but it's there.
In plain sight for any who look.
I sought and I found.
Those demons you've buried deep.
Within that strong yet fearful heart.
A trade we made.
Not of diamonds or of spades.
Nor clubs are bargained for.
We traded our hearts, forming a deal.
A fragile deed.
Easily broken.
But not painlessly.
Each becoming hopelessly attached.
Afraid the other will leave.
Even I, am wary and afraid.
Frightened that you'll move on.
Find a doll much better and smarter.
Much prettier and easier to handle.
And sometimes I wonder.
Do you think of another?
Do you wish we weren't together?
Am I holding you back from them?
All those girls that seek your love.
Would you rather accept theirs than mine?
It'd be simpler I know.
You always did say I was complicated.
Confusing and challenging too.
But I never did claim to be easy.
And this, of course, you knew..
Despite my doubt, you've chosen to stay.
And from your side, I'll never stray.
As long as I hold your heart..
And as long as you hold mine..

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Adding the link here to where I originally post my poems in case anyone wants to read more and to make sure no one has the rights to steal it. Thanks~

https://www.wattpad.com/99244427-we-liv ... ing-hearts
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