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i'm sorry

Postby sharklord » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:27 pm

    i say i'm
    sorry to the world
    you keep throwing
    things at me
    too fast for
    me to see

    don't you see
    that it's killing me
    i promise this
    is not a farewell
    but my own declaration
    of my well-being
    not seeing my pain

    i swear it
    doesn't stop
    one incident after another
    voices screaming in my head
    its not okay
    what's okay
    my pain is growing relentlessly
    torturing me endlessly

    when will it stop
    when will it fade
    my public facade
    is being broken
    by softspoken
    words of
    my devil
    haunting me til
    i can't wait longer
    for the resolution of
    my story

    is this too boring
    i'm sorry
    you all don't care
    for other's pain
    like they say
    no pain no gain

    but what have I gained
    in this world of misery
    what comes happily
    when will i find
    my treasure
    when i am
    someone else's displeasure

    i say i'm
    sorry to the world
    you keep throwing
    things at me
    too fast for
    me to see

    don't you see
    that it's killing me
    i promise this
    is not a farewell
    but my own declaration
    of my well-being
    not seeing my pain

    hey wait a minute
    i see it
    a light
    shining bright
    a ahead of me
    but it's so far

    but that's the price of being a movie star


if you read the entire thing, thank you. i am in a time of darkness and found this in my drafts. i wrote this in honor of my cousin, who after promising herself life, gave up.
the only difference between my cousin and me is that i know i have so much to live for.

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Re: i'm sorry

Postby crested gecko » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:29 pm

that was very nicely written, i'd love to see more of your work.
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby sharklord » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:40 pm

͡° ͜ʖ ͡° wrote:that was very nicely written, i'd love to see more of your work.


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Re: i'm sorry

Postby KayTheProblemPup » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:43 pm

NO I'M NOT CRYING SOMEONE JUST STABBED MY EYE..... this is so beautiful.. i am moved....
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby sharklord » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:44 pm

KayTheProblemPup wrote:NO I'M NOT CRYING SOMEONE JUST STABBED MY EYE..... this is so beautiful.. i am moved....


thank you, i think this is the best thing i have written...
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby Snowlondon » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:46 pm

May she rest in peace.

This is gorgeous :O <3
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby revvington » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:51 pm

I'm literally crying this is so beautiful!

I'm touched by this.
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby liightning » Mon Dec 11, 2017 2:53 pm

this is so beautiful and touching
*cries inside*
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby sharklord » Mon Dec 11, 2017 3:31 pm

thanks to all of you! it means a lot that so many people take the time to read other's work.
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Re: i'm sorry

Postby Cherry. » Tue Dec 12, 2017 1:51 am

This is so touching ;-;! *sheds tear because this is beautiful*
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