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Postby frankie (dup) » Wed Sep 06, 2017 10:19 am

A:N: I'm on mobile ATM.
Short chapter, but I figured it was best left where it is c:
Also, take a look at the reader questions! I'd love to see your answers


After much conversation, it was decided that Ada and the children would stay at the headquarters until they wiped Ada from the records and created a fake identity for her.

Eventually, Ada Carr became Maddy Grey. There were a lot of other details, but Aiden didn’t remember many of them. Ada was supplied with contacts and permanent hair dye (her hair was now red.)

The Ravens bid farewell to the woman and her children as she went to get a new license.

It was a little odd, putting it simply, to see the woman he’d grown up under with a new name, eyes, and hair.

Aiden just hoped that she wouldn’t change who she was and forget about her previous life.

Aiden didn’t want to be forgotten, not by Ada or anyone.
The next morning, Aiden ticked off another day until his fifteenth birthday when Loren forced his door open by picking the lock.
“Rico’s looking for you,” he said.

Aiden rolled his eyes.
“You’re a master of knocking.”

He walked out of the room, having to shout back at Loren to close his door.

Sometimes the guy just annoyed him to no end.
---

When Aiden reached Rico’s room, the man clasped his hands.
“Aiden! Thank you. Uhh… do you remember when I mentioned a prophecy in my letter?”
“Yes! Are you finally going to tell me?’

Rico nodded, but shrugged at the same time.
“What does that mean?” Aiden asked, raising an eyebrow.
Rico sighed.
“Well, prophecy isn’t quite the right word, I guess. It was more of an… explanation. There are… according to the prophecy, three gems. Each of them allows the user to harness a different power. The one you’ll be retrieving is Fire.”

Aiden blinked.
“Huh?”

Rico put his head in his hands and sighed.
“I’ve never been good at this talking thing,” he said, pinching the bridge of his nose.
“Thing is, my dad apparently ran into this… thing. My father called it the Dareau when he returned. He said it told him about the gems, and you. Very detailed. He wondered if it was true, and found you in the records, and everything the creature said was true.”

Aiden was taken aback by this news, his eyes widening and his mouth falling agape.
“Did it say how to get the Fire gem?”

Rico nodded.
“Yes, but…”

Aiden's face fell.
“But what?”

Rico clasped his hands together and took a deep breath.
“Thing is, you'll have to find another one of these creatures.”

The young man grabbed a map and slid it towards Aiden.
They was a red line drawn across one of it, and Rico pointed there.
“That line, that's your route.”

“Is there a catch?”
It didn't take a genius to spot that Rico still looked unsettled.
He took a deep breath.
“I can't come with you. Loren can't come either.”
“What?! Why not?”

Rico put his hand to his head.
“Nobody quite knows. That's why no one’s gotten the gem. In order to even reach the thing you need to solve a bunch of puzzles. And then when you actually get to it, you’ve got to figure out why it doesn't allow anyone over seventeen into its home.”
“And if I guess wrong?”

Rico's face fell.
“You get three guesses.”
“What happens if you get all three wrong?”

Rico's face said it all.

---

Aiden took a deep breath, shuddered, and put his head in his hands.
“Will you be taking anyone with you?”
“Maybe Pollux and Dulcie, if they're okay with… what's at stake.”

Rico nodded gravely.
“Good luck. I suggest you leave sooner rather than later. A Catago patrol will be sent there soon as well.”

Aiden stood up and speed walked out the door, blood roaring in his ears.
He found Dulcie and Pollux in the cafeteria.

“Hey,” Aiden muttered, shuffling his feet.
“Something wrong?” Pollux asked.
Aiden shrugged.
“There's this thing that I have to go get. It's a gem that controls fire. I have to get it from a creature-”
“Okay we’ll be coming with you. When do we leave?”

It was Dulcie who asked this in her usual, blunt fashion.

It would've been so easy for Aiden to just thank them and be on their merry way, but he had to tell them what they were risking.
“If you come with me… you'll be risking your lives. The creature… we have to guess why it doesn't allow anyone over the age of seventeen into its home. If we guess wrong three times, we'll-”
“Your point?” Dulcie asked. “If I was afraid of death, would I be here right now?”

Aiden smiled.
“Pollux?”

The ginger-haired boy shrugged.
“I won't pretend this isn't terrifying, but I'll come.”

Aiden's smile widened. “Alright, the map is with Rico, come on!”
They started to head back to Rico, but someone stopped them.
It was Curtis.

“Look, Aiden.”
The blond sighed.
“I'm sorry for what I said a while back. I didn't mean anything by it.”
“You're forgiven,” Aiden said simply.

“Wait, there's something else.”
Dulcie raised her eyebrows.
“And what would that be?”
“I spoke with Rico about the mission you guys are going in, and…”
He took a deep breath.

“I want to come with you.”

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Next Chapter: Twelve
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby Ranger of the North » Wed Sep 06, 2017 6:45 pm

Stay alive~ stay alive~ for me~


I'll probably answer the questions once this is finished and I've reread, 'cause I forget things way too easily on screens :p
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby frankie (dup) » Thu Sep 07, 2017 10:28 am

Ranger of the North wrote:
Stay alive~ stay alive~ for me~


I'll probably answer the questions once this is finished and I've reread, 'cause I forget things way too easily on screens :p
Is that alright with you? c:


Of course!
I hope to finish this by the end of the school year, and maybe if we're lucky, the end of 2017.

There will be a sequel, as it's a trilogy.
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby Ranger of the North » Thu Sep 07, 2017 6:34 pm

:.Duplex.: wrote:
Ranger of the North wrote:
Stay alive~ stay alive~ for me~


I'll probably answer the questions once this is finished and I've reread, 'cause I forget things way too easily on screens :p
Is that alright with you? c:
Of course!
I hope to finish this by the end of the school year, and maybe if we're lucky, the end of 2017.

There will be a sequel, as it's a trilogy.
Oh, wow! That's cool; good luck! (:
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby frankie (dup) » Fri Sep 08, 2017 1:07 pm

Ranger of the North wrote:
:.Duplex.: wrote:
Ranger of the North wrote:
Stay alive~ stay alive~ for me~


I'll probably answer the questions once this is finished and I've reread, 'cause I forget things way too easily on screens :p
Is that alright with you? c:
Of course!
I hope to finish this by the end of the school year, and maybe if we're lucky, the end of 2017.

There will be a sequel, as it's a trilogy.
Oh, wow! That's cool; good luck! (:


Thank you! The last book is going to be significantly darker than the rest. I might have to move the series to a new site eventually.
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby Ranger of the North » Fri Sep 08, 2017 3:40 pm

0.o dont u hurt any1 m8

Wattpad's actually pretty darkness-friendly c:
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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 5/9 Reader Questions!

Postby frankie (dup) » Fri Sep 08, 2017 3:52 pm

Ranger of the North wrote:
0.o dont u hurt any1 m8

Wattpad's actually pretty darkness-friendly c:


I will make no promises :twisted:
I do have a Wattpad, and his story is also in Wattpad, so it would be easy to just upload the darker chapters on Wattpad.
Of course, there is a chance there'd be no non-CS appropriate chapters, and if they are, I think I'd still post lighter versions on CS so people can still read the story even if they don't have the stomach for some violence.
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Postby Ranger of the North » Fri Sep 08, 2017 4:14 pm

:.Duplex.: wrote:
Ranger of the North wrote:
0.o dont u hurt any1 m8

Wattpad's actually pretty darkness-friendly c:
I will make no promises :twisted:
I do have a Wattpad, and his story is also in Wattpad, so it would be easy to just upload the darker chapters on Wattpad.
Of course, there is a chance there'd be no non-CS appropriate chapters, and if they are, I think I'd still post lighter versions on CS so people can still read the story even if they don't have the stomach for some violence.
YYYOOOUUU

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where
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I have an account, too!
Here's my page c:
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Postby frankie (dup) » Wed Sep 13, 2017 2:14 pm

A:N I'm sure this is a pleasant surprise :D

Everyone was visibly taken aback by Curtis’ news.
“Are you sure?” Pollux asked.
Curtis nodded.
“Completely.”

Dulcie frowned.
“So if you spoke to Rico, you know what you're risking?”

Curtis lowered his head.
“Yes. I know exactly what I'm risking. And I don't care. I don't feel comfortable letting a bunch of young teens going on this mission alone.”

Dulcie rolled her eyes.
“Pollux and I have taken care of ourselves for a while now. Besides, you're like, two years older than us. We don't need a chaperone.”

Curtis sighed.
“Look, that came out really wrong. Please, just let me join you guys.”
Aiden shrugged. “It couldn't hurt. We're just grabbing the map now, come on.”

---

They retrieved the map, and Rico bid them good luck. The older man looked like he was going to start crying the very minute the small group of four left the room.

And clutching the map, as well as a few bags of food and water, hearts heavy in their chests, the group set off.

---

They'd taken their horses to speed up the travel, and they took turns looking at the map. Though Dulcie was reluctant to admit it, Curtis was the best at reading maps out of the three of them. The journey could get precarious at points, and the map was often misleading or outright wrong.

Or, at least, it would look like it.
The first time they went off the map, they couldn't find the landmark that indicated they were going the right way. It took them three hours to find their way to where they should have gone.

The group took a small test and pulled some food out of the bag.
They were resting by the river, frustrated. There wasn't a bridge in sight, and the waters were too fast to wade across.

“Why does this place keep screwing with us?”
Dulcie’s voice was laced with sarcasm and frustration.

Pollux and Curtis were looking over the map, making sure they were going the right way, and not just looping in endless circles.

Aiden turned to face the two.
“Well? Where are we right now?”

Pollux chewed his pen.
“Some place called The Hungry Borderlands.”

Curtis sat up and craned his neck.
“I kind of wonder where the hungry part came from.”
Aiden shrugged and turned to face the lake.

Just in time to see a wooden, crooked, eight-fingered hand creep up and curl around his leg.

Aiden let out a blood curling scream and everyone turned to face him.
The creature rose up from the water, revealing two glassy eyes, deep in their sockets.

It had a wide, eerily grinning mouths, several large fangs going rows back in its mouth. The ‘wood’ on the back of its head was raised into spikes that looked like they could impale a grown man with relative ease.

It was slightly hunched over, but that didn't hide the terrifying sight of its two long, stiff arms, with crooked hands that clung to his leg, trying to pull him into the water.

---

Before he knew what was happening, Aiden had both hands clinging helplessly to the ground beneath him.

Everyone was just frozen in horror, staring at the creature.

Aiden flipped over to his side and grabbed a particularly deep rooted plant, then fumbled at his side for the holster of his ‘gun.’

He pulled it out and pressed the trigger, hitting the creature in the head.

The force of the small explosion sent Aiden flying.
He threw his gun as he flew, not wanting to smack himself in the head with it.

He heard it fall to the ground just a split second before he crashed into the dirt, his ears ringing and blood roaring in his ears.

He staggered to his feet, then stared at the creature.
There was no blood, just a hole below one eye.

Aiden cursed under his breath as he realized that the creature wasn't the same kind of alive as the group. It looked like they'd need to blow it apart in order to kill it.

He ducked under a heavy sweep of the creature's fist that would have definitely sent him sprawling, then skidded across the dirt, grabbing his gun and whipping it around, firing once, twice, three times.

Both of his shots missed. His hands were trembling.
He pressed the trigger a third time, and a new hole appeared in the creature’s head.

He blinked and stared at his still smoking gun.
That wasn't me.

Aiden cranes his head to see Pollux.
“I've got your back! Guys, blow it to smithereens!”

Before the ginger-haired teen could finish his sentence, Dulcie and Curtis had fired a shot each, and soon, the four Ravens were entwined in a deadly dance with the wooden beast.

Pollux fired two, deadly shots before ducking away from an even deadlier sweep and pulling a knife from a second pouch in his side, slipping the gun back into its holster.

What's he doing, a knife won't do anything!

Pollux threw the knife with deadly accuracy at the creature’s head, the creature barely dodged, but look confused.

Aiden took this as a cue and fired quickly at the beast.

Within moments, Aiden could smell burning wood, and by the time the dust cleared and his eardrums stopped screaming, pieces of wood littered the ground.

It was true. They all had his back.

---

Aiden winced when Pollux carefully washed away the dirt from the scratches on his cheek.
“Sorry! Sorry!” His friend was furiously apologising.
“You slid across the dirt, on your face.”
Curtis’ voice was somewhere between amazement and concern.

Aiden smirked. “Yeah. I’m amazing.”

Pollux took a deep breath and dropped the cloth into the group’s garbage bag.
“Alright, Aiden, this is going to hurt like hell.”

Aiden was confused for a second before he saw Pollux pull out the disinfectant.
“NOPE! NOPE! NOPE! I don’t need it!”

“Yeah, you kind of do.”

Aiden squeezed his eyes shut and sighed.
“Just get it over with…”

After a painstaking clean with the disinfectant, Pollux placed a bandage over the scratches.

Dulcie sighed.
“They should really put up a warning sign.”

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Re: Rανєη Rιѕє UPDATE 12/9 Reader Questions!

Postby Ranger of the North » Wed Sep 13, 2017 8:47 pm

STRIDER!!!!

...oh, wait, wrong book....
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