- and as she cried,
her flowers broke apart
from her branches
and flew across the field,
until it was covered
in a blanket of petals
years passed,
and as they went on,
trees began to appear
surrounding her
in the beautiful forest
of herself
overjoyed,
the tree danced
with excitement
and the boy returned
with a new lover
and begged the tree
for forgiveness
she bent down,
giving the boy all of her blossoms
and reminded him
that first love was true,
and that she would be there
to give him her flowers
time and time again
until he realized
who he really loved.
as the petals of the flowers
peppered around her branches
fell to her tired feet
and after months of waiting
for somone to find her
and bring one of her beautiful
cherry blossoms
away with them
he came running up the hill
take my flowers to your loved one,
she cried,
extending her arms
towards him
so he may reach
but he declined, insisting
that they were not beautiful
enough for him
instead
he decided to pick
the fullest, reddest rose
on the bush
and as he went
to pick the rose,
its stems wrapped tightly
around his wrists
dotting his arms with their thorns
the tree wept,
for the boy
had been blinded
by what he assumed
was love
- sorry that it's a bit long! i'd like to hear some critiques maybe? <;
read up to down, then to the next column. i separated it so the post wouldn't be too long!
My only complaint (and even then it's a fairly small one) would be one of grammar/formatting cx Sometimes it's just hard to determine if a new sentence has begun, or if the previous one's continuing. A few full-stops or commas can easily remedy that, though! c: And the tree's speech might need speech-marks, but Idk, you might have left them out on purpose :p Everything else is really well done! Good job! 
