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Warriors:A new beginning

Postby 56743ffl » Sat May 19, 2012 2:20 pm

The time has come,and Thunderclan,Shadowclan,Windclan, and Riverclan have had their stories told.Yet only a moons walk away,four new clans have tales to tell,Fieldclan-daring,but calm,Treeclan-peaceful and kind,Wildclan-Brutal,but not evil,and Cloudclan-brave and loyal.The clans are small but strong.I hope you enjoy this,and this is not only based off Erin Hunters series, but also off the warriors game I play with 3 of my friends,and our cats will be the main focus of this story.I'm Gleamkit,the lazy but strong she-cat who dreams of leading her clan,Cloudclan.I'm also obsessed with shiny stuff.Friend #1 is Rosekit,my cool,calm sister(only in-game),who will kill anyone who destroys her rose bush.Friend #2 plays Stripekit,a bouncy kit whose energy never ceases to amaze me,and she loves to climb trees.Friend #3 is named Fastkit,from his obsession to run.He's also a part-time scientist(I now can't trust an apple to be safe...akward)who uses lab-apples,not rats-why waste good food?Anywho,we are part of a prophecy-
As four leave,four will come,with strength,speed,mind,and sound,for when the clans are dying only 4 will save the warrior ways~
No,I'm not telling you who has which power-unless you bribe me!
I also apologize for the long intro,and will now start the story.

Chapter one
The kits


"Cometstar,look!The little tom is coming!"Snowflake cried.A former loner,Snowflake joined Cloudclan after Cometstar,Cloudclans brave leader,saved her from a dog.They soon fell in love and Snowflake soon after gave birth to 4 heatlhy kits,1 tom,and 3 she-cats.Cometstar licked her ear."He has a strange blue tint-I like it."The little tom was gray-blue with bright orange stripes,and was crawling as fast as he could to go and lie against his mother."We should name him Fastkit.Look at him go!" "Good idea,Snowflake.It suits him."Cometstar turned to see 2 kits lift their heads and open their eyes at the exact same time.They stared at eachother then turned back to their Mom.Soon,they were curled up against Snowflake who gently cleaned their tiny bodies."Tigerkit?"Snoflake asked,pointing at the striped orange kit,its black stripes were just like a tigers."No,but I like Stripekit,it suits her." "Fine,but what about the pink one?"Snowflake glanced at the kit.Its fur was more brown with a pink tint,but looked like roses in the moonlight."Thats it!Rosekit." "Its a beautiful name.But wasn't there 4 kits?"The golden brown she-cat in the back hadn't moved."Oh no!Is she dead?" Fear washed over Cometstar's face as he quietly padded over to the still body.He gently nudged it,and suddenly a little set of golden eyes were staring into his."No shes okay,she fell asleep!"Snowflakes worry sunk away as a little shine filled her eyes."Lets name her Gleamkit,because of how she can't stop staring at that gleaming star."Cometstar nodded as he carefully placed the kit beside her litter mates."I think this means that we are successful parents,Snowflake." "Yes,yes it does".
~End of chapter one~


Chapter two
3 moons later...


"Dadstar!"Rosekit ran to her father."Rosekit,I told you that my name isn't Dadstar,it's Cometstar." "But Dadstar..." "Rosekit,no buts." Snowflake slowly crept up behind Rosekit,and gently batted her tail before bounding into a bush."Huh?Dad-Cometstar...someone hit my tail..." Cometstar smiled,knowing his mate was playing a little joke on her kit."No-body hit your tail.Don't worry." "But..." "No buts." "Fine...oh hi Stripekit!" "Hello!Lets play tag!" "I'm in!"shouted Fastkit who was suddenly beside his sisters."Whoa!"Stripekit staggerd backwards and fell on her back."I heard you,Fastkit,but you nearly gave Stripekit a heart-attack!"Rosekit hissed. "Chill-out guys.If were gonna play tag we shouldn't fight."Gleamkit remarked as Stripekit got back on her feet.
"I'll be it!"Fastkit said.Everyone groaned."But you always catch us so soon!"Gleamkit whined."That's why its fun!Now get up and RUN!"As the sisters ran for safety in holes,trees or dens,Fastkit counted to ten"1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9...10!I'm coming for you!"As they ran around and played,Cometstar and Snowflake lay down to watch them."I'm so happy to see them so joyful and healthy."Snowflake whispered."Me too,Snowflake.Me too."
~End of chapter two~Sorry this chapter was so short,I've ran out of what to do here^^|

Chapter three
The rose bush


Rosekit sat in the nursery, completely bored.Though not a whiner,she nearly ripped Fastkits face of when he asked to play tag. "Are you okay?"Snowflake gently licked Rosekits head."I'm fine,just bored." "What about ta-" Rosekit cut her off."No tag." "Maybe a walk?" "Where?Its too noisy and lame around camp." "Then I'll take you for a quick walk outside of camp,as long as you don't wander off." "No problem!Can Stripekit come?" Rosekit and Stripekit were pretty much inseparable,and great friends,only fighting over important things. "Of course!" "Stripekit!"Rosekit ran off to find her sister."Mom?Where are you going?" "For a walk." "Oh.Fastkit?Wanna wrestle?" "Mouse-dung..." "Get back here!"
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"Its so cool here!" "Yeah...hey whats that?" Stripekit looked at a large thorny bush with beautiful red flowers on it."Its a rosebush.This is what you were named after,Rosekit.Pretty,isn't it?" Snowflakes question was never answered.'This is my meaning of life.To plant one of these in camp.'thought Rosekit.'Its amazing...' "Rosekit?Are you okay?" "Yes,Yes I am."
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"Its the most beautiful thing in the world!Its red," "From blood"whispered Gleamkit."and green," "From rotting" "And brown!" "Mud." Glamkit soon had a paw in her face."Faftkit tinkz itz funnah."Gleamkit murmered (Its hard to speak with a paw in your face).Fastkit also had a paw in his face 3 seconds later."Nod fannah." Gleamkit smiled."Trust me,it is."
~End of chapter three~

Chapter four
ATTACK OF THE KILLER APPLES!


"Fastkit?Where are you?We want to play "tag" with you!"Gleamkit called.She and her sisters were playing a prank.The idea was that Fastkit would run over to them but they had a vine on the ground so that when he ran past a bush,Stripekit would pull on the vine so he'd trip on it.Then,Gleamkit would either tackle him(If he was still standing),or body-slam him(If he fell).So far,the plan wasn't working."Where is he?" "Dunno." "I'll find him!"Stripekit called from her bush."Good luck..."Gleamkit muttered.
"FASTKIT?WHERE ARE YOU?DON'T BE A MOUSE BRAINED FOOL!" "Stripekit!Watch you language!"Pandaface hissed."Sorry...have you seen Fastkit though?" "He's in the nursery." "Thank you!"Stripekit bounded to her sisters and told them."I wonder what he's doing..."
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"Fastkit?"Rosekit peered over his shoulder."What are you doing with that apple?" "Absolutely no idea." "Wanna play tag?" "Not right now..put this here and...I did it!" "Did what?" "Dunno,don't care!Come look." Stripekit and Gleamkit padded over and looked at the apple."Can I poke it?" "No." "Hit it?" "No." "Bite it?!" "No." "You suck."The kits stared at Fastkits creation. Suddenly they heard"Ticktickticktick" followed by a BOOM!Smoke filled the den and when it cleared,Fastkit was surrounded by his sisters,who were ready to play tag-the hard way."Sorry?" "GET 'EM!" "Mouse dung!"
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When the kits returned to the den,Fastkit had been mauled.It took awhile to catch him,but 3 against 1 is never fair.It also took Fastkit to the medicine den for 3 days,leaving Gleamkit,Stripekit,and Rosekit the freedom to play their games-Wrestling,Butterfly stalking,and Rose watching. Though now haters of Fastkit's apple bomb,Gleamkit,Stripekit,and Rosekit might just save the forest with them.Or not.

Chapter five
Close encounters with the unfurred kind


Gleamkit was asleep,Stripekit was climbing a tree,Rosekit was attempting to plant a rosebush,and Fastkit was chasing his tail at 12 mph.All was good for the clan,not just the kits,considering they would wreak havoc when they played tag or wrestling.

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Re: Warriors:A new beginning

Postby 56743ffl » Sat May 19, 2012 2:21 pm

Cloudclan:
(Main Clan)

Leader:
Cometstar
Deputy:
Pandaface
Medicine cat:
Mintleaf
Medicine cat apprentice:
Willowpaw
Warriors:
Burrpelt,Crowflight,Angelsnow,Heatherheart,Bullfoot,Froglegs,Lilystream
Apprentices:
Littlepaw(Mentor=Lilystream),Clampaw(Mentor=Bullfoot),Crabpaw(Mentor=Angelsnow),Hedgepaw
(Mentor=Burrpelt).
Queens+kits:
Snowflake+Fastkit,Gleamkit,Stripekit,Rosekit
Rabbitnose(Expecting)
Mates:
Crowflight+Rabbitnose
Snowflake+Cometstar
Elders:

Fieldclan

Leader:
Oakstar
Deputy:
Stormfate
Medicine cat:
Duckpuddle
Medicine cat apprentice:
None
Warriors:
Bravesoul,Lightheart,Turtleface,Skylight.
Apprentices:
Hogpaw(Mentor=Turtleface).
Queens+kits:
None
Mates:
Stormfate+Skylight

Treeclan

Leader:
Dewstar
Deputy:
Barkmoss
Medicine cat:
Robinsong
Medicine cat apprentice:
Pepperfur
Warriors:
Cinnamonfur,Flamestrike,Mintfoot,Icefire,Foxteeth.
Apprentices:
Bearpaw(Mentor=Foxteeth),Pondpaw(Mentor=Icefire)
Queens+kits:
Pecanmelon+Slugkit,Jaykit
Mates:
Pecanmelon+Barkmoss

Wildclan

Leader:
Wolfstar
Deputy:
Dawnshadow
Medicine cat:
Sweetflower
Medicine cat apprentice:
Chillpaw
Warriors:
Jackalhowl,Midnightscreech,Moonphase,Boartusk.
Apprentices:

Queens+kits:
Deathberry+Bloodkit,Spiderkit,Doomkit
Nightlock+Scarkit,Vilekit,Clawkit
Mates:
Deathberry+Moonphase
Nightlock+Wolfstar
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Re: Warriors:A new beginning

Postby Tails the Fox! » Mon May 21, 2012 9:44 am

Hey, good story. Didn't the directions say not to post things like this? Never mind. I'm wrong. :oops: Oh well, GREAT STORY!!! I'm Foxflower. My sister is the deputy of LeafClan. Her name is Icepelt. My other sister is a warrior too. Her name is Tunasong. I want to be a queen. My mate's name is Dogbreath. :oops:
Our medicine cat's name is Poppylegs. Her apprentice is Whitewhisker. My apprentice is Lashpaw while Icepelt has her sister, Splashpaw.
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Re: Warriors:A new beginning

Postby 56743ffl » Tue May 22, 2012 6:44 am

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Re: Warriors:A new beginning

Postby あおき » Wed May 30, 2012 1:12 pm

*Ahem*
Gleamkit; I thought the original 4 clans were still intact...(alive)

Anyways, great story. :)
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