(Hiya wildfire6! Been reading this, it's interesting, wasn't bothering to do feedback before, but this secound 'book' is very interesting, so I thought to say hi and to let you know I enjoy this, it's entertaining.
(oh and as a writer to a writer, you shouldn't change too many of your original ideas or it'll sound like someone else's work, I think for the first one just add in a few more journal entries(not now, but if you ever decided to publish!
)and it'd be great to read for an average teen. Plus you could have like two books in one so like the first then the secound, so you don't actually have to change anything really then.
(So yeah, good job so far.
(oh and I think that in the first book if you change between characters (like it's been suggested a few times) that it won't seem like Kitty is telling the story so much anymore at least that's what I think)
(anyway, shall get back to rping!)