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Re: post your songs

Postby TuneToTabbys<3 » Thu Jul 19, 2012 12:20 pm

Okay, so i need help with the ending of my song i think what i have so far is good but critique's r DEFINITELY welcome :)

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"" =Title
** = Whisper sing
. . . . = Pause a heartbeat for every period
'' = repeat 2x
(L) = laughs



"Happy Ending"

Intro:
*hey charming,
saw you with her and forgot our happy ending . . . .*

V.1: I used to think that it was ment to be,
That fairy tale endings were real but you
proved they were just promises full of lie's.

Chorus: You said you were sorry that you
needed another chance, I was stupid, an
i said yes, melted into your deceitful arms.

Bridge: I gave you my heart, really believed
you were forrr 'me'




(down below is the last verse of the song but i need the in-between)

V.?: I thought it was a happy endinnnngggg . . ,
But you shattered my heart into a million pieces
an i, i woke up found out that you wern't my prince
after all . . . (L) and i thought it was gonna be a happy ending . . .
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Re: post your songs

Postby Inuyasha Fan! » Thu Jul 19, 2012 12:30 pm

Everywhere i go
I see flashing lights
People asking to get autographs
Why can't i be normal?
Why can't i have my normal life back?
Why can't i be the person i used be?
I don't want the Lights flashing anymore
I don't want the people asking me
I wanna be normal


That's all i got
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Re: post your songs

Postby Mr.Pandora » Fri Jul 20, 2012 7:16 am

~Feathers wrote:Everywhere i go
I see flashing lights
People asking to get autographs
Why can't i be normal?
Why can't i have my normal life back?
Why can't i be the person i used be?
I don't want the Lights flashing anymore
I don't want the people asking me
I wanna be normal


That's all i got

sooooo...you need help?
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Re: post your songs

Postby Inuyasha Fan! » Fri Jul 20, 2012 5:40 pm

disco Mr.Pets wrote:
~Feathers wrote:Everywhere i go
I see flashing lights
People asking to get autographs
Why can't i be normal?
Why can't i have my normal life back?
Why can't i be the person i used be?
I don't want the Lights flashing anymore
I don't want the people asking me
I wanna be normal


That's all i got

sooooo...you need help?

yes *looks at feet*
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Re: post your songs

Postby Acoustic. » Fri Jul 20, 2012 7:25 pm

Author note: This song means so much to me. It is a break up song, but I wrote it after I had the worst break up ever. Her name was Kennedi...and I went into deep depression after she broke up with me. Faking smiles, pretending to stay on topic when really all I could think about was her. This song is about how strong of an impact a break up can have on you. Please, when you read this, think about the words and try to relate to them.Thank you.

Steal Your Heart

It feels like years and years since I stepped into your life.
Those five words cut me like a knife.
And thanks to you it never stops.
The memories when I was on top.
But every boy has to drop.
And to this day I wonder what I could’ve done to make it better.
And when she left I didn’t wanna let her.

And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
No matter how far, away you are.
You’re never too far away.
And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
Whatever it takes to steal your heart, again.

There are days when I miss your smile.
And I really wanna spend time with you, for a while.
Oh, and I know you haven’t even moved on.
So why can’t we meet up at dawn?
I don’t want you to be, forever gone. Yeah.

And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
No matter how far, away you are.
You’re never too far away.
And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
Whatever it takes to steal your heart, again.

I miss the days when we would go on a date.
I would always be just five minutes late.
My arm fit perfectly around you tight.
I wonder if I’ll even sleep tonight.
You’d say I love you and I’d say it back.
But now we’re only going in the wrong tracks.

And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
No matter how far, away you are.
You’re never too far away.
And I’ll bring you roses.
And I’ll give you roses.
And I’ll send you roses.
Whatever it takes to steal your heart, again.
Again, yeah.
It feels like years and years since I stepped into your life.
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Re: post your songs

Postby Mr.Pandora » Sat Jul 21, 2012 1:43 pm

What to do when I made my move

Well,I'm sittn' here,thinking what should
I do when I made my move,I moved my
pawn,moved my queen,but I didn't
move my king,I moved my rook,
I moved the knight,Now I don't know what
to do,Ba------------aby!What should I
do-----------o!when I made my
mo-------ove!What do do-----o!

1.I don't know,theres no check'er check mate!
But I don't know what to do next ,Just I don't
no what to do ba---by!What(X3)to do-o-o!
Don't know what to do when I made my
move!

2.I'm right here,my head will blow up!
Don't know what to do when I made my move!(X3)
I don't know what to do when I...made my mo-ove!
I wanna know what to do!

3.I don't know what to do!I know you won't help!
so its no use!I don't know what to do!(X3)
Just I don't know,Don't know!Don't know!
I don't know what to do what to do when
I made my move!

(Ending only) I don't know what to do when I made my move!
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Re: post your songs

Postby Mr.Pandora » Sun Jul 22, 2012 4:21 am

Fill in the blanks song edition. c:

I'm writing a song,I know what to
(Yell?write?etc.) I (act) to the
(Sound?Beat?Etc.) I'm really (Feeling)
with my new song!I (Love?Hate?Etc.)
I am (feeling) about it!I'll share it
with a (Enemy?Friend?etc.)I think
I'm living a (Good?Bad?etc) li-ife!
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PANDORA HOUR!"

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Re: post your songs

Postby .AngelFromAbove. » Sun Jul 22, 2012 11:52 pm

My sister.. She has.. Killed herself.. --Removed-- She was .Kurt.

Anyway.. I'm writing a song called Around and Around

-Angel
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Re: post your songs

Postby .AngelFromAbove. » Mon Jul 23, 2012 12:53 am

It's okay.
I understand

-Angel
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Re: post your songs

Postby Mr.Pandora » Tue Jul 24, 2012 2:08 pm

still can't post anymore?
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